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** How to Write a Commentary ** ** What to look for... **   ** F – Fortunate – Form ** ** C – Children – Conclusion **
 * T **** – The **** – Theme **
 * V – Very – Voice **
 * M – Master – Messages **
 * T – Teaches – Tone **
 * I – Incompetent – Imagery **
 * D – Deficient – Diction **
 * R – Rich – Rhyme/Rhythm **

=Now let's break that down...=

__ Theme (The) __

 * What is the text about?
 * What information do you have, eg the writer’s name/date?


 * __ Voice (very) __**
 * Whose voice do you hear in the text?
 * 1st or 3rd person? If 1st person, is it the voice of the author or are they playing a role?
 * Ascertain to whom the text is addressed
 * Establish the situation is which the text is set

**__ Form (fortunate) __**
 * What is the overall structure of the piece?
 * Are there any obvious ways in which it could be divided into sections, ie its layout, its meaning or by changes in the language?

**__ Messages (master) __**
 * Look for ideas which are embedded below the surface of the text
 * Think about the author’s aims and purposes
 * Are there any signs of irony or satire?

**__ Tone (teaches) __**
 * How would you describe the writer’s ‘tone of voice’; is there an atmosphere or feeling permeating the piece, such as gloom/joy?
 * If so, what it is about the writing that creates this effect?
 * Look at the use of setting in time and place
 * Check out this awesomely comprehensive list of words used to describe tone...

**__ Imagery (incompetent) __**
 * What kind of visual images does the text present?
 * How does the author use simile or metaphor?
 * Comment on both individual examples and on patterns of images
 * Explain and analyse these examples in terms of their contribution to the overall meaning of the text

**__ Diction (deficient) __**
 * What do you notice about individual words and phrases chosen?
 * Are there types of words that recur? (ie different words relating to death/childhood etc)
 * Are there words that seem unexpected/out of place. What effect do they create?

**__ Rhyme/Rhythm/Sound effects (rich) __**
 * In poetry, what effect does the rhyming have? (if there is any)
 * Rhythm can be important in prose too: are the sentences flowing or jerky?
 * Does the rhythm change at any point? Why?
 * Other sound effects are creating by devices such as alliteration.
 * Remember to comment on the //effect// of these
 * If you cannot see any particular effect it is better not to mention these features at all

**__ Conclusion (children) __**
 * Finally, return to an overview of the text. Sum up how the effects and details of style you have analysed come together to create a ‘whole’ piece or writing.
 * Do content and style compliment each other?
 * What has your reading of it contributed to your understanding of the subject?
 * Does it offer a way of looking at things that you had not considered before?

**__ Senses __** The one aspect that this acronym does not specifically include, but it is essential to look for, is the senses. ...are all aspects that you should look for in a text. You should examine to text to see if there are any examples of the senses that appeal to the reader & are used to draw them further into the text.
 * Olfactory (smell)
 * Auditory/Aural (hearing)
 * Gustatory (taste)
 * Visual (sight)
 * Tactile (touch)


 * __ Information… __**
 * Paper 1 of the IB AI course will contain 2 unseen texts, one of which WILL be a poem, the other may be novel/short story/essay/ biography/journalism
 * The texts may be extracts or complete pieces
 * At higher level there will be no accompanying questions or guidelines. At standard level there will be guiding questions intended as prompts to help you structure your commentary. You do not have to respond directly to these questions, neither must you simply answer them as individual questions; they should be integrated into your overall response.


 * __ Top Tips… __**
 * Do not be daunted by a poem or prose extract
 * There will be good reason why a particular piece has been chosen, you will discover them with close reading. Texts about which there is nothing to say are not usually chosen!
 * As you begin writing your answer, begin with an overview or general point (eg theme) and then go on to study it in detail
 * Read the text through thoroughly at least twice
 * Underline key words and phrases. These underlined words represent the ideas that you will need to keep in mind as you plan and write your answer
 * Annotate the text. Annotation helps you remember details and enables you to find them quickly again
 * Note down your initial responses to the effects created by specific words/phrases and then incorporate them into your commentary
 * List the key points that you need to cover in your commentary. Try to arrange them in a logical order so that your answer flows.
 * As you analyse ensure that you include referenced quotations to back up your arguments – Statement, Quotation, Analysis
 * To try avoid using first person (with the possible exception of your conclusion, where to reinforce an important point, it can be rather effective)
 * Avoid slang
 * Try to be aware of dialect and local usage and avoid using it.
 * Avoid the use of abbreviations, eg ‘did not’ is preferable to ‘didn’t’ and avoid ‘etc’
 * Unless the number is very large try to avoid writing numbers in numerical format
 * Try to use the present tense, but more importantly be consistent in your tense use

AJR, adapted from //English for the IB Diploma// 2003  Updated XI-08   ** GREAT EXAMPLE! ** Night Wind is a past Paper 1 commentary text from the IB. Have a look at it...

1. Read through the poem to 'get a feel' for it. Jot down a quick thought in the bottom left hand corner about your initial thoughts. 2. Read through the poem again, a bit more carefully this time, with the aim of understanding the poem more fully. Do you still agree with your initial thought? If not, add to your comments/amend as appropriate. 3. Go through the poem approx 6 times more (!) with a different colour pen each time highlighting a different component of commentary analysis. Eg 1 colour for dominant lexical field, another colour for secondary lexical field, another colour for imagery (simile, metaphor etc), another colour for other poetic devices (alliteration, anaphora etc) another colour for sensory appreciation, another colour for structure etc 4. In the top right hand corner make a very brief note on tone 5. In the top left hand corner make a very brief note on voice 6. Plan the structure of your essay... Remember to link ideas together so that your response will be a sustained argument whereby each concept builds upon previous analysis. Like bridges linking islands... 7. The above steps should have taken you approx 30 minutes. You may now begin writing your essay!
 * How to tackle the planning and initial analysis **

Attached here is an 'ideal answer' (if there is such a thing!) of Night Wind. Have a read through it and see to what extent you agree.